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Dear grief:
You strangled me
As I snuggled into your hugs
I remember your joy
Toying with my lungs

Dear hate:
I remember the excitement
The bruises you left
Told me to "look at the concept"
As you sneered at me, you never left
Oh I smiled as you burned my flesh

There I go thinking of the past, it's dead
Here I go feeling no peace, just dread

You'll never get to break me
Emotion's ran me deep
They had prevented me from sleep
I looked elsewhere ignoring them
And yet the emotions tried to brush my lips again

I want to tell you, my sweet emotions,
I used to be yours
The past is, the past
And little by little, I don't know you anymore

Dear Pain:
I remember how you buckled me
The ground felt so heavenly
Your needle pierced me deep
You held on tight
I waited on you; you never gave me the time

Dear contentment:
I remember the dead silence
The hard stop, as everything slipped
And suddenly all was balanced
The nothingness ringed
Your silence made me scream

There I go thinking of the past, it's all dead
Where did my peace go, there's nothing but dread

Dear Emotions:
Remember the time
You all shamed me, leading me
Pulling me in different directions
And I'll be damned, if I let it happen again

I turn my back, let you settle down
No little children will haunt my Town
I look at you one by one, you all see
I won't let you ever control me
When at one point, you are at the lowest point in life; or when you can't seem to keep yourself together; or maybe it is different obligations to whoever/whatever. We all must somehow learn to be patient, breath deep and and take it one breath, one step at a time

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MourningDoves Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
This left me breathless. I am unsure of how to express myself after reading this. I am with V3r9il, I may have to let it sink into my soul before I can respond properly.
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Student Artist
^_^ I'm glad it made such an impact
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V3r9il Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing.
Loved it very much.
Will have to read it few more times to sink in.
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Student Artist
^_^ I"m glad you like it so much
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swootness13 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012
This makes me think of the song that we listened to today in english...It was called Crossroad by Tracy Chapman
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:iconwhats-left-of-me:
Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Artist
:o ohh I will
look that song up
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bvbfan4evr Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student General Artist
wow
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MrFuzzyPants2049 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*Tear* I know... I know.
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Adonael Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
'Emotion's run me deep
They prevent me from sleep
I look elsewhere ignoring them
And yet the emotions brushed my lips again'

Personally, I think all that stanza weakens the 'you're not going to break me line'...it's a powerful line, which I feel would have more emphasis if the rest if the stanza was either separate or not there.

That being said, it's a powerful and emotive poem. I loved your opening paragraph about snuggling into your lungs. Brilliant writing there!
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Adonael Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
'Emotion's ran me deep
They had prevented me from sleep
I looked elsewhere ignoring them
And yet the emotions tried to brush my lips again'

I still don't like that bit quoted above...it just doesn't fit for me and it still weakens the 'You're not going to break me line'

It's just my opinion of course. If you like it, keep it. Overall the poem still does its job :)
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Artist
oh thanks for catching that for me
I was trying to make it past-tense
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:iconadonael:
Adonael Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah right - glad I could help and you're welcome :meow:
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Student Artist
I hope I fixed it correctly?
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Adonael Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry...I think I replied, but it's gone all weird so you might get it as just another comment ^^;
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Student Artist
o.o I dont think I got another comment from you haha maybe you put it in the wrong reply box?
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Adonael Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Maybe

Anyway, this is what I said...

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'Emotion's ran me deep
They had prevented me from sleep
I looked elsewhere ignoring them
And yet the emotions tried to brush my lips again'

I still don't like that bit quoted above...it just doesn't fit for me and it still weakens the 'You're not going to break me line'

It's just my opinion of course. If you like it, keep it. Overall the poem still does its job
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Student Artist
ohh i see
well I do like it like that, so i'ma keep it

and thanks, I'm glad you still like it haha
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psychowithawhistle Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012
So beautiful~
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student Artist
thank you :) I'm glad you like it
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stu53 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
For someone so young, you seem to know alot about life, i did enjoy reading it, thank you...
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Artist
Thank you, sometimes big things happen to young people
I just wanted to capture it for those people like it
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stu53 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I understand what your saying,your doing what is true, and the truth matters alway, keep it going and dont let anyone knock you down, truth always wins
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:iconwhats-left-of-me:
Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Artist
^_^ yes
thank you, I shall with a smile
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stu53 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Good for you,enjoy what you do,and keep that smile.
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NoxElohim Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012
Incredible work. It goes fantastic with the picture as well. Thank you for sharing
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:iconwhats-left-of-me:
Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Artist
^_^ anytime
Check out more of my poems if you get the chance
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wutske Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Dang ... spot on
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mippieArt Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
THis is very beautifull. I relly love it. Great job!
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Artist
thank you ^o^
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:iconolaf68:
Olaf68 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012   Traditional Artist
very beautiful, it's like coming back after the fall.
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:iconwhats-left-of-me:
Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Artist
^_^that is exactly how it was for me when I wrote it!
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Olaf68 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012   Traditional Artist
:} awesome got that right. :woohoo:

No, you have a very beautiful way of putting a person in the shoes of the subject of the poem.:}
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Artist
I"m glad ^_^
I hoped that it would, so that way people can have a connection through words if they need too and the such
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Olaf68 Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012   Traditional Artist
:nod: I think emotional poems need that. It gives a connection form the writer to the reader.
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Student Artist
Yesss, it does.
it helps and works wonders
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Olaf68 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012   Traditional Artist
:nod: :}
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Mierren Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
lot of emotion. great poem!
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Artist
thanks a bunch
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rakila Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Filmographer
So hot.....!!! :sprint:
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Hibleach1 Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Love this poem!! I actually FELT da poem whn i read it! The emotions were pulling strongly at me...:)
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Artist
I"m glad it did
I hope all my poems that you read can make that happen ^_^
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takemetoverona Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Writer
The emotions in this poem are very strong, I love it! :)
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HannaHanno Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, it's such a beautiful poem *-*
I loved every piece of it!
It's such a strong and emotional poem.. It makes me feel sad and happy at once <3
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Artist
^_^ I"m glad it had such an impact
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MasterSamwise Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
very nice
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Ithilloth Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012   General Artist
there is so much freedom in this. I love how wise and mature your view on emotions is... people tend to suffer and complain about how much they hate or regret, instead of trying to be loving and free. though it's difficult sometimes, I think anyone can be free if they only allow themselves. it's all our own choice.
actually it moved me to tears T_T I was really in need of reading such words, thank you so much...
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Artist
yes although it is still difficult it will take a while to push threw that veil
I"m glad this poem moved you in such a way ^.^
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robostorm Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
<3 it!!!
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naV3r Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Interface Designer
I felt every bit of that poem. Nice job!
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Nyxchen Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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