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Dear grief:
You strangled me
As I snuggled into your hugs
I remember your joy
Toying with my lungs

Dear hate:
I remember the excitement
The bruises you left
Told me to "look at the concept"
As you sneered at me, you never left
Oh I smiled as you burned my flesh

There I go thinking of the past, it's dead
Here I go feeling no peace, just dread

You'll never get to break me
Emotion's ran me deep
They had prevented me from sleep
I looked elsewhere ignoring them
And yet the emotions tried to brush my lips again

I want to tell you, my sweet emotions,
I used to be yours
The past is, the past
And little by little, I don't know you anymore

Dear Pain:
I remember how you buckled me
The ground felt so heavenly
Your needle pierced me deep
You held on tight
I waited on you; you never gave me the time

Dear contentment:
I remember the dead silence
The hard stop, as everything slipped
And suddenly all was balanced
The nothingness ringed
Your silence made me scream

There I go thinking of the past, it's all dead
Where did my peace go, there's nothing but dread

Dear Emotions:
Remember the time
You all shamed me, leading me
Pulling me in different directions
And I'll be damned, if I let it happen again

I turn my back, let you settle down
No little children will haunt my Town
I look at you one by one, you all see
I won't let you ever control me
When at one point, you are at the lowest point in life; or when you can't seem to keep yourself together; or maybe it is different obligations to whoever/whatever. We all must somehow learn to be patient, breath deep and and take it one breath, one step at a time

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:iconmourningdoves:
This left me breathless. I am unsure of how to express myself after reading this. I am with V3r9il, I may have to let it sink into my soul before I can respond properly.
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:iconwhats-left-of-me:
Whats-Left-Of-Me Oct 7, 2012  Student Artist
^_^ I'm glad it made such an impact
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:iconv3r9il:
V3r9il Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing.
Loved it very much.
Will have to read it few more times to sink in.
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Oct 4, 2012  Student Artist
^_^ I"m glad you like it so much
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:iconswootness13:
This makes me think of the song that we listened to today in english...It was called Crossroad by Tracy Chapman
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:iconwhats-left-of-me:
Whats-Left-Of-Me Oct 2, 2012  Student Artist
:o ohh I will
look that song up
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bvbfan4evr Oct 2, 2012  Student General Artist
wow
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:iconmrfuzzypants2049:
MrFuzzyPants2049 Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*Tear* I know... I know.
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:iconadonael:
Adonael Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
'Emotion's run me deep
They prevent me from sleep
I look elsewhere ignoring them
And yet the emotions brushed my lips again'

Personally, I think all that stanza weakens the 'you're not going to break me line'...it's a powerful line, which I feel would have more emphasis if the rest if the stanza was either separate or not there.

That being said, it's a powerful and emotive poem. I loved your opening paragraph about snuggling into your lungs. Brilliant writing there!
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:iconadonael:
Adonael Oct 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
'Emotion's ran me deep
They had prevented me from sleep
I looked elsewhere ignoring them
And yet the emotions tried to brush my lips again'

I still don't like that bit quoted above...it just doesn't fit for me and it still weakens the 'You're not going to break me line'

It's just my opinion of course. If you like it, keep it. Overall the poem still does its job :)
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