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You can't see me
You can't tell me who I want to be
What can I do
To convince you
That I am all you'll ever need?
And I start to understand
And I smile in my sleep

Death watcher
Dream taker
Stone believer
Heart breaker

I watch you Mr. Death
I know what you want
Dying is your greatest
Torture
You taunt me with life
I smile knowing
You can't get me this time

So forgive the misgivings
I've tried so hard to find you
I even see you in my dreams
Your face turned blurry and hued
And I waved goodbye to Mr. Death
As I breathed my last breath
As I smile in my sleep
ahh a little something something
that I jotted down

I got the Picture from Google I did not Draw or make it

ok ok guys lets stop the arguing here
I think everyone should stop the verbal fighting because
of someone dislikes my poem or not, whether someone uses a petty insult
just shake your head and move on please
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:iconderek-l-j-sohma:
Derek-L-J-Sohma Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012
Gorgeous poem but a sad concept, still, I loved it
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student Artist
thanks, I'm glad you love it
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:iconderek-l-j-sohma:
Derek-L-J-Sohma Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012
XD You're welcome
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KYghost Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D The Poem is great!!!...Not sure if I agree with the use of unknown cover art...I know it makes it more attractive but, the original artist may not be fond of the idea if they are protective of their work.
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Student Artist
well I got it off Google, and if someone claims it then I will put in a different one, and as long as I didnt say I made it then I should be good. I have the cover art so it can help with the visual
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CatsandJammers Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
There's only one thing I say to death
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Artist
uhh?
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Limro Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Where did you get the picture?

And nice poem!
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Artist
^o^ thanks
I got it off google
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xLuckyxFridayx13x Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome! I love the concept!
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Artist
thanks ^o^
since everyone has a different perspective on poems, what was yours?
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xLuckyxFridayx13x Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, I always really enjoy poems that personify death. I like to think that death is quite like a human in some respects... that's it, I guess. ^.^
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Student Artist
ahh I get you and that is epic
and I also think the same way
but at times I also see it as a Force
like dark matter or pure substance idk
sometimes I think about it too much and it hurts my brain lol
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xLuckyxFridayx13x Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Sometimes I think about it so much, I feel like I have certifiable depression or something... then I wave it off because I'm already certifiably insane and go back to thinking! :D
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Student Artist
LOL thats a good way to put that haha
we all have our sane and insane moments dont we?
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xLuckyxFridayx13x Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yesshh I think so :)
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dummymobiletips Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
like!
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LovBlondGirlMuscled Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
Like Skeletor from Masters of the Universe
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MaxTheSwed Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Amazing!
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Artist
thanks ^+^
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MelancholyInTheRain Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
Awesome job.

Uhm.. Sorry but I have to point this out xD

The "You're" in the 3rd and 4th paragraph should both be 'Your'.

But really!! This is really good! *stalks your page* ewe
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Artist
Oh thanks ^_^ I dont mind
I have trouble with the "your" and "you're" and stuff T__T'
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MelancholyInTheRain Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012
Oh cool ;A;
Well 'You're' is basically : You are. [So you'd say : You're looking beautiful today. / You're wrong. Life sucks. xD]
For everything else it's 'your' ^ u ^ <3 >> [That pen isn't mine but yours. / Your mum is very stylish.]
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2012  Student Artist
Ohhh ok I get it...man why cant the English teachers just say it like that? ehhkkk!
thanks dude ^_^
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MelancholyInTheRain Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012
LOL. I'm only 13 y'know xD
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2012  Student Artist
ouch that hurts T.T
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:iconmelancholyintherain:
MelancholyInTheRain Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012
LOL..
[link] ewe <3 I'm hurting you because I love you LOL.
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2012  Student Artist
that's how my ego feels right now LOL
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sunddenly Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow SO FUCKING AWESOME DUDE !!
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Artist
Thanks soo much ^o^
glad that you enjoyed it!
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MandyPanda-13 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Professional General Artist
GAAAAYYY
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Artist
As the owner of this poem: I'm writing this too everyone who will read this and see this

I've seen her profile and the way she responds to many deviants and it shows her immaturity and ignorance, she does need a reality check, but I doubt any comments from the deviant community will shake her because only for someone who has a great impact on her will make a difference. All the negative comments will not help change her for the better.

So please stop the hate comments, Cyber-bullying is not right and does not justify negativity, it increases it.

Remember Opinion/Bias is Subjective...
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Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Artist
At 13 is a hard age in life, you learn threw mistakes and success
but you should not be arrogant or it will be trouble on your part

basically what I"m saying is that
you need to start paying attention to what you say on the internet
and learn to put more thought before you write your words

just stop replying to all the hate comments on your reply and ignore them
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Energizzze Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
So what?
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:iconmandypanda-13:
MandyPanda-13 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Professional General Artist
That's dumb I wright alot better
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:iconwhats-left-of-me:
Whats-Left-Of-Me Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Artist
Everyone has their own opinion on writing, If you don't like it its fine and go somewhere else
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theTrickyBunny Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconalotplz:
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LiruRules Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
If you write a lot you must be able to spell better. S:(
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:iconmandypanda-13:
MandyPanda-13 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Professional General Artist
Um I spell fine. I'm a fucking grammer nazzis
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:iconlirurules:
LiruRules Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Then why did you spell 'write' as 'wright', and 'a lot' as 'alot'?
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IndoxicSalt Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Photographer
Darling, you can't even spell Nazi.

Try, Try again.
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LiruRules Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
lol
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:iconmandypanda-13:
MandyPanda-13 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Professional General Artist
It. Was. An. ERROR!!
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:iconindoxicsalt:
IndoxicSalt Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Student Photographer
Whatever you say~
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Ryuuichi-kun Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
a grammar nazi that keeps making retarded spelling mistakes. Hn, i think we have a word for that:

A laughing stock
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Ryuuichi-kun Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
So, lets see. You're a teenage, narcissistic emo girl, from what i gather from you profile, i could call ya somewhat of a fag hag, you can't spell 'write' properly, and yet you labeled yourself as a "Professional General Artist". On top of that, you troll and act immature as fuck.

Do the world, and this community a favor and get a life
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embercoral Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Actually, she's doing me a favor by exposing me to amazing artists that I would not have noticed otherwise. Sure, she's not appreciating them, but that doesn't mean I can't!
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Ryuuichi-kun Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012
Great, at least somthing productive comming out of this then ;)
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